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Garden of Life
The Supreme One detached the sky and the earth,
Split the Sun and moon,created stars.
The creator created a creature,
to tender and nurture the creatures he created
Flowers in the garden, life in the garden
Flower wither,flower blossom
The sole of each life
Water watered the flower garden
The soul in the soil, sprout radiant
The length and quality reside in him
Some thorns, some roses and daffodils
Rose felt love and spread same
Torn was bitter, so he spread hatred
The vine dresser pluck out at will
Some at dawn, Other at dusk
Time and season happens to them all
Watch the flower flaunt in the garden.
Flower of life, soon food for another.
Toyemlaw
(c)People's Poet
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
scribbler
Thu, 2021-02-11 11:41
Greetings
Welcome to Neopoet. Using the garden to represent life was well done.......stan
Toyemlaw
Thu, 2021-02-11 22:54
Thanks Stan, I appreciate.
Thanks Scribbler, I appreciate.
Toyemlaw
author commentchima ononogbu
Thu, 2021-02-11 15:05
Hi Friend
Well put together.
Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.
Toyemlaw
Thu, 2021-02-11 22:55
Thanks Chima.
Thanks Chima.
Toyemlaw
author commentLavender
Fri, 2021-02-12 00:03
Garden of Life
Hello, Toyemlaw,
Welcome!
Lots to think about in your poem - I especially appreciated the image of the sun and moon splitting, and the creation of the stars. A bit of sparkling magic! Your last line is strong and brings the poem full circle with your title.
Thank you!
Lavender