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Future's not ours to see

Angels
fairy tales
nursery rhymes

Parents
and Teachers
make kids believe

Their souls
now recite
Que Sera Sera....

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This is inspired in the realization of the stark unreality of the Nursery Rhymes and Fairy Tales we teach innocent kids only to realize when such innocent lives are lost to school killings that they are just fantasies
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Comments

this a unique piece of poetry and creates a sense of childhood but also the cruelness of reality .in my opinion the title ''THE LIES WE BELIEVE'' would have suited better but that is just my opinion. over all great poem

Thanks for your read, comment and suggestion about the title. I will give it a thought for sure...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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