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The Fruit Stand Yard

Apple trees in the back
bearing lip red fruit
sweeter than any sugar cane

A pear tree
in the front
small grass green fruit
growing off of it
its fruit often used
for batting practice

In the middle
a tree of peaches grows
with a small anti squirrel cone
around its middle
and the juicy ripe fruit
making these rodents’ mouths water

The small wooden arbor
of grapevines with their
bunches and bunches
of purple sour grapes
hanging there
too sour to be eaten

But even though
their tender has passed
and the fruit
no longer harvested

Somethings just as beautiful
but not edible
take their place

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I like this poem Ben
Love the idea at the end too.
great ' friend

My take on this poem is simple to explain. It was well written and placed a smile to my gray. Keep up the good work. Your friend Sakkk.

Steven A. Kacer

Thank you everyone for your praise and comments on my piece. I hold this one very close to my heart. Thanks again.

Benjamin

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