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Fricken Fireworks
Fricken Fireworks
Screw the air, who needs it clean
Screw those robins in their nest
Screw the grass, who wants it green
Make those bunnies crazed and stressed
Churn the soil into waste
Fill our lungs with heavy metal
Breathe it in, it’s toxic-based
Grind our airways, choke and nettle
Send plastic shit to every ocean
Traumatize the waterways
We all need this grand commotion
To celebrate our holidays!
We need it loud
It makes us proud
We need it dirty
Our country is worthy!
Slap Mother Earth across her face
We need to put her in her place
Each harsh Ka-BOOM
Each sulfuric fume
Helps kiss her fragile soul goodbye
Who cares?! This is our Fourth of July!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
Sen99
2 weeks ago
The Farce of July
Hello Lavender
Well said and well scribed, a very timely poem, more a protest at poor moral, ethical values and stupid fireworks, what have we done to this earth, to celebrate ?
Thanks again
Sen99
Lavender
1 week 6 days ago
Hello, Sen!
The impact of fireworks is so negative. Always glad when they are over.
I cringe through the entire holiday.
Thank you so much for reading!
L
Ray Bear
1 week 5 days ago
Awesome
I love how unapologetic this is. Lines like 'Traumatize the waterways' really stick with you. It’s a sad truth wrapped in a great rhythm, and it definitely makes you look at the whole spectacle a bit differently. Brilliant piece.
Lavender
1 week 4 days ago
Hello, Ray,
Each year it's more obnoxious. Makes me sad...
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L
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