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His grey eyes barely visible
in between green blades of grass

though crouched he stood
in readihood

his hunting skills first class.


The breeze was in his favor
plus, he was hidden in tall reed

an awkward stance
will eat circumstance

so his best is what he'll need


A polished element of surprise
and rehearsed moves he knows so well

he's honed each skill
with intent to kill

quietly longing for death's smell


All surrounding circumstances
fade clean away for each cat;

they couldn't care less
so what? If they make a mess

they practiced looking like they meant to do "that

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Structured: Western
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and a nice glimpse into felinity.

I think the ellipsis and inverted commas detract rather than add.

Neopoet Directors

those commas weren't necessary but inverted commas are these things " ". And they definitely disrupt the flow of the read.

Neopoet Directors

...didn't have the time to answer you. Here I thought I was being more clear.

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