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F.E.A.R
It's all because of fear......
Different variety of views
Are most righteously pursued,
Whether backed by defiance or virtue
Or either chased away
If the world seems out of order
With not enough sacrifice or torture.
So we're forced to choose
Where we're supposed to lay the fruits
Of our labor by skin color; behavior
Social status; demoralized ethics.
Praying to a god for protection
As long as he's under one nation.
Otherwise, you're misinformed.......Satan
In the eyes of the masses.
Starting with politics,
We're on strings; hostages
Thinking we're in support out of a
Faulty
Expression of
Accordance and
Rapport.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
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Comments
brittle light
Wed, 2016-06-01 02:29
Politics in general, or
Politics in general, or particular political concerns, are not my favorite topics.
Putting that aside, you do have an interesting way of expressing yourself.
the last bit seems a little awkward...why not just say FEAR
also, capitalizing the first word on each line is an archaic and arbitrary idiosyncrasy. Not necessary!
that's all I got,
Al
jzarmel
Wed, 2016-06-01 07:30
thank you for your time to
thank you for your time to read and comment, even on a subject that you're not too fond on. that means a lot to me and shows me that if someone is willing to step out of themselves to see even deeper, then i can be willing to the same.
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