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A Familiar Shadow

l had a familiar shadow
surprise me with such a grace,
that I beamed out-loud in silence with a grin;

I owned that fragile moment
that Time cannot erase,
and was dealt a sort of comfort from within.

'Twas good to see your smile again,
'twas good to hear your laugh,
l deemed it so, and said so after all;

then, l calmed my racing thoughts
(and cut confusion down to half),
eliminating my propensity to fall.

l always felt a wee, tad, bit
like l were in a trance,
you mesmerized to the point of no return;

l never will apologize
for asking for a dance,
let me know though, for l still have time to learn.

Quite possibly, you can make the time
to proper...tutor me,
l'm quick to learn so tell me, what you say?

Bear in mind of my short pockets
l'd be forever in your debt,
strict attention, is about all that l can pay!

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
One more tryst with a Honeycomb. Smitten is only half of the pair....("set", if you will).
Editing stage: 


I like where you go with imagination doc. This is a piece I wish I've written but I don't have this amount of imagination to compose one alike. You hold my breath from the very beginning to the end. I very much like the closing romantic stanza.
Very well done!!

PS Why do I think you need an "I" Stanza 1 Line 1?


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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...greatly honored, and hugely appreciative for your kind assessments. l just finished a slight re-write, and edit for flow. What say you now?

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