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FALSE EXPECTATIONS

Expectations, expectations
perfect rhymes
and inflections
at all times.

Detailed exacting imagery,
pictures painted using words
all revealing some "real" me.
Written words set free like birds.

Searching for some classic line
or maybe one to induce laughter
that I can pluck from memory's vine
seldom finding what I'm after.

Maybe I should just give in
and throw my pen far as I can.
Sometimes inspiration tastes like tin.
I know that I'm no poetry man.....

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Your title and poem go very well together, but of course I beg to differ the theme, it's excellent.
Expectation of what others want can be hard. So well said.

Thank you...Teddy

Sometimes I think I have made a mistake in improving my writing. At one time I had no expectations of writing well and now I almost feel like I should either write only a master piece (Which I'm not capable of) or nothing

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You being one of my oldest friends , I feel I can say that if you feel to change something with the help of another then do so if you agree, if not leave as is, I have found that years can pass and I find my own way of editing. That's the beauty of neopoet we are here to make eachother better. There is no time limit sir. Here you have a little peice if magic.

Thank you...Teddy

I am never a good judge of my own stuff

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This is one of those "perfect" poems that you write every now and then. I can't disagree with a single thing you have said here. With plain and simple language, you have expressed exactly what was intended, like no one else could have in this moment. Without flaw, this has been what you do best. What more can you ask for? To be funny, give a great bit of wisdom,
or truth? I would rather see that part of you that does this. ~ Gee.
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even a blind pig finds an acorn on occasion. You should see the pile of poetry which I began then abandoned because I decided it wasn't good enough. But I appreciate your visit as always

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scattered here and there and everywhere. Ya think I just crank out poems effortlessly? I sometimes, find that after a couple of lines; that it just ain't working. So I stuff them in a box or leave them on my computer in my notebook for a while. If I don't get back to them or find that they still aren't working, I just toss them. Sometimes, I don't even get to use things I think of, because I say to myself that "I'll remember that line or theme" and find that it's just a distant memory when I get back to it; because I didn't write it down. Keep writing and don't worry about what you didn't write. ~ Gee.
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Our Chatroom is open 24/7 Feel free to use it for
keeping in touch We have poets around the world and it is fun
to have real-time conversations with those that are up
all night or on the other side of the world.
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The problem is I do my writing on spiral bound notebooks. So these unfinished poems are mixed in with finished ones and are always there haunting me

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I know that I'm no poetry man

I seldom hint, I just go ahead and say what I mean lol. So no this is not about anybody other than me.......Started to not post this as it seems almost as if I'm too self centered

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Hi Stan, why ever do you think you're no poetry man? Throwing your pen away? OK, use the keyboard, but don't throw the baby out with the water...lol.
I always find your poems inspiring, amusing, philosophical and much more. If you threw some away, that was a silly thing to do. I'm presently posting my weakest poems, hoping you poets will help me perfect them.
The title, content, spacing, all is fine. No nits. Inspiration tastes like tin? Weird...
Enjoyed, all the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

You see, I write stuff but in the back of my mind I'm always comparing myself to the greats like Frost and Poe and Wordsworth. Sometime I think I might be getting close but usually I just sigh and figure well.....this is at best OK. Btw have you ever put your tongue on a piece of tin? I promise if you do you will have mixed reaction to it lol

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