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To Experience The Numinous Is Really Very Easy, Without Sacred Molecules

With practice,
a notion of Sphinx,
a couple of blinks
a dance
and a glance at a sunrise
will do it.

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you have put across the message very nicely in this short write...the way I read it is that for a strong spiritual connection religious beliefs may not be necessary....reads smoothly too... a pleasure read..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you for your perspicacious read, sir.

cheers,
Jess
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My pleasure Jess to read such a well crafted meaningful short poem..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

in a while! A truly wordy title, but without such, one might have gone off into the sunset and completely misinterpreted the intent as just being a flashback! Sorry, no criticism. ~Gee.
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I don't know why but really long titles on really short poems always make me smile.

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Jess
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Hi Jess,
That one I want to hang on my wall. It feels like an open window.
Your poem conveys the thouught and the mood perfectly. The tittle is not needed to my opinion it just says the same in a weird way.
Pleasure to read your new poems.

IRiz

my friend.
That is a comment truly worth getting.

cheers,
Jess
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My pleasure.

IRiz

Do you realize your using the spine allows religion to sneak into your poem ? But the intent still comes through.

You would be the first to say that an experience of the numinous is often opposite to religion.

cheers,
Jess
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In my opinion any experience which leaves a person awe struck is like a religious experience. BTW previous comment should have said SPINX instead of spine lol. But let's not argue religion, good enough that we can experience stuff that leaves us speechless........

my friend.

cheers,
Jess
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