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An Exemplary Heart

She cried but all in vain
to who drove her insane.
Though wrecked, with dominant pain,
she survived, she rose again!

A lesson to obtain,
A lesson to learn or feign;
Ne'er blackmail Her in strain,
She's a brave heart in reign.

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Your words of application give me the motivation to write more.
Thank you dear friend.

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'Again' wasn't really repeated. Line 4 (again) while in l2.stanza 2 (gain) , but I took you suggestions and eddited accordingly with too much appreciation.
Always great to hear from the experts sir Alan.
Thank you

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is one of tenses. While raised is conceptually right, I do believe that the proper word would have been [rose], not raised.
I like your title, the internal rhythm is great and it flows well from beginning to end. It made me think of a queen of hearts!
[Not the one who said; "Off with their heads" LoL
~ Geez.
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Well pointed. Pleased to know you like it especially when it comes from a rhymer that's you!!
Thank you for the kind visit.

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it left hungry for more on the same vein.

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appreciate your kind visit. I know what you mean but I am a fan of those short pieces especially when I am writing again after a while.
Thank you for your thoughts.

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Rula
any special reason
I can't imagine

Lovedly. I think I want her to be recognized as a special
"$he".
Thank you for reading.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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CAPITALIZE ALL
SHE'S AND HER
That will make all the
DIFFERENCE
RULA
LOVEDLY
me also please
when blind men hear
they only
HEAR

You absolutely have a point. Shall look into it.

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........Robert Frost☺

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I see I'm late to the party and the experts have already given great suggestions. So I'll just say hello desert flower so you'll know I passed by

Always a pleasure to get you on my page. It really means a lot.
Any news from Wesley?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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