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Eternity

the seduction of eternity

ice house Shekinah
sad hag
during the blood soil days

pets left on the dark side of the moon
a deluge of morality in a palace of tears
structures of consciousness under compression

the tongue of eternity
a veiled Eros licking
flickers a selfish dream serenade

pollen of discontent
like a pregnant superhero
dressed in a candy wrapper
treading a visionless ezoic brain

bugs
war zones of memes and genes

all matter is metaphor
near death objects
meteors of grinning spiked crowns

we are memetic plucked limbs
sulfurous dust
short lived bloated yolks, clawed minds
mice in a supermarket with tape worms
and a trade mark

we are something boiling

the bowels of eternity
graves of meat and mud
crucifixes in a screaming abyss

belly of shadows

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most of these images, especially "the spiked crowns/meteor" one. You've obviously learned a lot from that odd root of Surrealism.

Thing is, they aren't economized in any particular way, Technique, all that friend!

Yes, I recognized the surreal strain immediately in myself through your riveting work Touched beyond measure!!!!!
As for your last comment can you be more explicit I think you mean the work could be better organized;
Technique??? I need to understand this better

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your choice: metrics, the leaning on of certain vowels--check out The Book of Forms by Alfred Corn

okay thanks

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I thought free verse was free of formal structure resembling natural speech Pls define leaning on vowels Can you give an example and show a qualitative difference between the structures of leaning and not leaning
Are we talking assonance. word segmentation as in various forms of prosody?
I am of not unfamiliar with the economy of language as in pairing down, streamlining
Is this what your referencing to?
Google, Amazon etc. produced no Book of Forms by Corn
How about
The poems heart beat A Manual of Prosody by Corn

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