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Enough

I sit here in this very room alone
every night contemplating my life and choices
thinking to my self will i ever be Enough
will i ever be Enough for my father
will i ever make him happy
will i ever be Enough to be loved right
sometimes when i have good days
i always think im Enough for everything
but lately it seems like no matter
what i do or say
i will never be Enough
not Enough for anyone
or anything

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words: 
We as humans always fight with out self's or our anxiety and we tend to push our self down and we tend to have pressure from others or family to be successful , but we usually feel like we fail especially when they tend to react negative towards you , so i felt this was really relatable.
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

a very huge welcome to Neopoet,

This is a sad poem, about needing the love of a father, I feel your anxiousness, being 19 is hard, and your feelings are the same as so many in the world, sometimes fathers are hard to please, so we must exept that we are enough inside ourselves. in other words love who you are.

here I have made a little change to the format to simply show you how it could change the way someone reads it, in stead of small case (i) i have used capitals, it make when you speak of your self more significant in my eyes. I hope you like it, this is a workshop and this type of review you will find a lot so i hope you like what i have done.

I sit here in this very room alone
every night, contemplating my life and choices

thinking to myself will I ever be Enough?
will I ever be Enough for my father?
will I ever make him happy?
will I ever be Enough to be loved right? .................. i have used question marks but that up to you to decide

sometimes when I have good days
I always think I’m Enough for everything
but lately it seems like no matter
what I do or say,

I will never be Enough
not Enough for anyone
or anything.

have a lovely day and enjoy our workshop!

Thank you...Teddy

Welcome to Neo. and I hope you find your voice here. You have a very good start and I can find nothing to
criticize. I do agree with her, that the capitalization of [enough] makes it seem like it is of extreme importance and makes the lines that contain it that much more valuable. Nice work for your first here. I hope that we will see much more from you. ~ Geezer.
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Hello!
Wonderful poem. I, too, like that you used a capital for Enough. I feels like you personified it, as if Enough is a completely different person than you - not you. Maybe another poem around the corner has "i" in caps and Enough in lower case?
Thank you!
L

Thank you guys , yea i agree with everything and thank you so much for the corrections and ideas . I have a lot of more poems to share and hope to get some more tips and much more ! thank you guys once again .

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well I got here late,all corrections are made Please use upper case where applicable
alll I have to say is for one welcome , second it was a pleasure meeting you in chat
and most important please yourself not others, be YOU
looking forward to seeing more from you

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I forgot to add perhaps a stronger title something to draw a person in

Our chat room is not only there for Thursday afternoon chat 3:30-4:30
but it is there and ready for all to use at anytime of day come often and hook up in conversation to those across the globe

that for some there is never enough. Welcome to the asylum. If you have any questions concerning the sight just holler and if I don't know the answer I'll steer you to somebody who does

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