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The Dust Bowl

Barren cradle in the nursery
Cold kettle on the stove
Withered stubble in the fields
Empty baskets in the grove

Forsaken table in the kitchen
Useless broom by the screen door
Yellowed paper on the sofa
Frayed carpet on the floor

Tangled hangers in the closet
Tattered sheets across the bed
Haunted boots on the porch step
Rusty hammer in the shed

How the dust and wind battered
Swept away a life once lived
How a farmer and a family fled
When the farm had no more to give.

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Structured: Western
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the ending is pretty nice; it gives me a feeling of finishing a long, good book series and adds a touch of mystery.

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Lavender

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Congratulations on your rhyming. this is a sad one for me, its a truly wonderful poem. Your imagery today is a kudos! Take care my dear Lavender.

Thank you...Teddy

An extremely harsh period in the United States during most of the 1930s decade. Recently saw a documentary that suggested that soil tilling greatly contributed to the massive devastation.
Thank you so much, Teddy!
L

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It's never too late to learn something new and you always provide something truly gracious, thank you for this.

Thank you...Teddy

Thank you!
L

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that this a is wonderful piece L. You so accurately describe a part of U.S. history in (what I take to be) one of the saddest chapters of Oklahoma's long life). If I were to be entitled to a guess I would expect the name of the share-cropping family to be Jode,  having vacated the farm to seek a new life in California.  I expect that you have read, and are familiar, with the works of John Steinbeck, although yours is a completely original and meaningful description of that period.  Thank you ever-so-much for telling us all this story.

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Kind regards, Alan
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Yes, I'm familiar with John Steinbeck's work, in this case, The Grapes of Wrath, although it has been awhile. I would like to read again - maybe after this pandemic and election have passed and my emotions are a bit less fragile. :) I saw a documentary on climate control called "Kiss the Ground" recently. Just one of the many suggestions was that soil tilling contributed to the Dust Bowl, which led to re-studying that period. Horrible, horrible time. There are many images of once productive farms completely abandoned.
Thank you so much!
L

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I wonder which will be the worse for you ~ the pandemic or the election!

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Kind regards, Alan
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Trying to stay optimistic regarding both!
L

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impressed that you put the [D] on the end of live to make sure that the pronunciation stayed with give; instead of making it live with a long I. It didn't change the meaning of the word, yet stayed true to the rhyme. Nice! ~ Geez.
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So funny that you mentioned that - although I think it works as far as rhyme and sound, that "d" just looks out of place to me. Always appreciate your views!
Thank you!
L

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I imagine there is an eeriness and an emptiness - I've only seen photos. The toll was so great...
Thank you, Jerry!
L

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soryy I am late This is absolute perfection I was able to picture all of it the imagery is strong

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L

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Beautiful, and the atmosphere so tangent. I love it! :D The line "Haunted boots on the porch steps" gave me chills.
Are you sure this is free verse? It looks and sounds exactly like structured western style poetry to me.
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Yes, it is Western. I very seldom write anything other than free verse - creature of habit. I will change that.
Thank you so much!
Lavender

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