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Dulcinea

Dawn's flourish under the furrows of evening
crept up in beauty, just as you did

Where that spectral raven, winged windward,
flitted in-out the periphery of my vision

Grainy images of sky, of scudding cloud
gave in to your presence coming into view

Glorious colour, the rain washed anew,
and another day was born in your image

And whatever ravaged my dreams was tamed
in the gentle flame lighting on your coming

Sweet, sinuous in strength, elegance sleek
through and through, a classic beauty

An inspired vision, to behold in sighing arms
reaching for that soul you once showed me

And the night sobbed quietly at the glow
it couldn’t steal from within.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Just a short fragment. Going for a real colour thing at the moment.
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it's only my loss
I had never read you first
we both in free verse
only,
I at least rehearse
at times it's terse
oftener 'tis worse
ask Jess across the shores
he is an Aussie of yours

Always nice to receive a verse for a verse. And whatever we can bring to this place, we bring.

Thank you :)

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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I looked up Dulcinea, having never read Cervantes. The title inspired a poem from you, or a poem inspired a title...either or, very appropriate.

you can write in a style I can't seem to get near (as a writer)..almost classic romanticism to my mind...very European-esque. I am a standard brand yankee
and would feel out of my element if I tried to write anything as mellifluous as you have done here.

my modern approach seems almost non-un-anti-poetry compared to this

I appreciate the difference though. It's a big big arena we play in!

regards,

Al

That means alot coming from someone on the other side of the creative pond, so to speak. It's true, I think we all develop these styles intuitively. I couldn't really claim to being that scholarly. I did start out studying classics, but flunked when I discovered pubs and girls :/.I like playing around with words and sounds, linked to ideas and images, and just see what comes out. I always liked Twain, seemed like a grounded foil to some of the flowery counterparts in Europe, then again, I think that's true for quite a few of the hard-knocks schooled writing outside of the fold of ole Blighty, goe for Australia too. Always something new to see.

Thanks.

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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