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Dry Ophelia

Submitted by fink555 on Thu, 2018-03-22 00:17

Dry Ophelia

unformed, anonymous
urgently pinched
in waves of finned dispersion

a distant face streaming
slowly apart
the slumping waves of a forgotten pond
i drown inside as a lost cat

a thin river
dry Ophelia,
unsure where to fade

carrying bouquets neither real
nor artificial
symbiotic petals

christening a sleeping sea
with clear blushes even
you don't understand

dry as the brush you
were painted with
still not knowing

as your cheeks

strike the canvas
at once and with a cup of stars

my dry Ophelia

Review Request (Intensity): 
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Simon

Thu, 2018-03-22 03:15

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A thin river
Dry Ophelia,
Unsure where to fade

The imagery it carry make me imaging how beautiful it looks like.
Thanks for this poem.

fink555

Fri, 2018-04-27 01:53

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what that comment totally meant, but anyone who is a Director of Community Outreach anywhere is entitled to his perception.

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fink555

Sat, 2018-04-28 00:05

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Ophelia is a woman who drowns herself out of despair. So "Dry Ophelia" is sort of an aesthetic contradiction, there, a nonrepresentational poem. A dry Ophelia is a woman who still has the chance to live but is confused when she is on land, so to speak. Thus the lines in the poem.

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