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Driving in daylight

I can't recall how long it is
Since I drove home amongst the light
Plucked out like candyfloss, crimson
Golden stacked up height
The sun breached full the place
known only by its dark left look,
And broke among the parting clouds
Like crowds do for a tender flock,
And ignited the strands of vapour
That wait for its grand encore daily

And to the south, none were left high and dry,
They were bequeathed a lavender hue
And I wished for my life to paint their singular truth
Or hold the eternity of colours, forever in my eyes.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I haven't posted anything for a while..I have been working like crazy..also in the midst of moving house, and some life changes..may not be around for a while (quite as much) so just wanted to post something simple..a view from a car driven in daylight. nice during a 6 month tasmanian winter.
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and really like the last 2 lines.
Whereas everyone raves about New Zealand and millions of us Yanks go there every year, Tasmania shares the same climate and biodiversity and spectacular beauty, yet so little is heard about it. ( I won't tell anybody about it if you don't.....)
But as your poem is about anywhere, any a similar landscape which arouses the imagination to a poetic truth of beauty. And that was captured very eloquently.

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Safe Eumo ;) Will probably be away for a while, moving house etc. but will check back soon.

Take care.


Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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