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A Dream

I had a dream one night,
That all had seen the light;
Lift your Vail and see the universal field,
With understanding the truth is revealed;
All secrets within are locked inside,
And the closed minded ones are full of pride;
Wisdom is a search that can not be found,
Do we really stand on solid ground?
Searching for answers,first find the questions,
Still reaching no revelation;
In this time warp we stay,
As our minds run away.

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"I had a dream one night,
That all had seen the light"...really a together piece I love the words and phrases that you used.
Seeking solace for the simple minded really intense piece.

The universal field hit home you have to believe in something you know.
This write should be on the top of the charts a real humble read.
Thank you for the opportunity in sharing

Mario Vitale

I like to keep my work simple but yet have people think
I think you will like my next one

author comment

the stuff of fantasies has always lured me to write. I like this poem as it covers both dreams and unrealized aspirations........stan

This poem comes dangerous close to being preachy. You need to make it about your inner struggle.

You write well and I look forward to more work and your feedback to others.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

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