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Dorian Gray in Hexadecimal Pastels

I am the gigabyte’s cracked tooth,

the GIF peeling in a Harvard darkroom.

Our profile picture floats in here in ReelTime;

What was your first memory?

I am the Like Liquor, the Pixel Party, the Virtual

Opioid and Synthetic Letter Bend. Our profile picture

floats here in an Instagram pond, move closer.

Stay. The aluminum of your trackpad massage

warms the blue chill, come closer. Download begun.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 


"lake of liquor..the Pixelation partiers
Opiod synthetic letter bender..."

"heats my blue Chill"....


excellent poem

my changes are just small
of which is my own
struggle of late
and the de cluttering
of excess descripters
this is like magic this

and Im not that great at

But Im doing what I can
to comment on other
poets work which is
actually working
because it gets me
looking into my own

This is a very clever

Thank You!

Well, Pixilated Penguins my heavens, you have been away two years.
Your imagination and flow of words even though about the ether and it's key prints as apposed to paw prints, is good.
Hope you start to write more here,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You Both. Great to be back.


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poem is about Mark Zuckerberg


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