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Dog suite number one.

"The Wine Dark Dog"

What darker claret could you pour
into the minds inviting cup,
to pollute and pullulate once more
at the thought of giving up?

Why did you drift from me,
down, down leagues of memory,
to a farther unfathomed sea,
where I can't feel your form?

A diablo, devil, long known shadow,
follows me on into dreaming slow,
onward, into my middle years
where I can't let him go

For he's the keeper of the tears,
the one who knows of keys,
where all dark doors lead,
and master of that heinous power: need.

"Old dog, no tricks"

I carry dreams around in my pockets
cried out at moment of waking
suitcases full of black-hearted books
so heavy my arms are breaking

I look for the memory every night
as my eye clamps shut on the day
of when You poured in the window light
like wine for body's entree

You can't give an old dog any new tricks
just play him a couple of tunes
in hopes that the sweet gear of mind might slip
and his old dog smile, crack slant from his lips
before the night consumes
and he's gone.

"A dog’s life"

A century spent in an iron shed chained,
A further hundred years, howling at the moon,
A millennium lost in the dark wood snapping at phantom twigs
An eternity of sniffing thy brethren’s collective arse
A long afternoon skulking the streets, grey whiskered and homeless

A procession of Dogs - stealing though time,
on an ever decreasing length of twine
padding a concentric walk around
the post of an endless walk wound

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Been a while sine posting. In the process of moving, always stressful. Just letting the black dog off his lead, more pragmatic and cathartic than anything really here, not to say that I won't come back and re-work/develop (probably in a few weeks at this rate). Any feedback appreciated - I' doing OK btw :)
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Comments

I love the imagery here - and I like the fact I can identify with the subject material (despite it being quite dark) as the black dog sits in my shadows too.
'I carry dreams around in my pockets' is a fantastic line, don't lose that if you rework. Jx

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Thanks Jane,

I will hang on to that line, I like it too. When I look at it now, it feels more like a song? I like the image of the black dog (having one literally in the back yard, and one who hangs around in the back of my head) I think it's good to acknowledge this, and find creative ways to reign him in, like poetry ;).

Thanks for the comments,

take care, Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

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author comment

I think Winston Churchill coined the phrase the 'black dog' - it seems to sidle up to so many of us at times.
Funny thing is, when it has a real good hold on me, I can't see a way forward at all. I can't see round it or through it. When the wretched hound has been banished, I can't recall the despair I once felt.
Heyho - artistic types. Jx

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I enjoyed the unleashing, do it again.

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