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Dimensions of a Woman

The Oracle dwells within
The speaker of truth
a cleanser of sins
The Witch
lies and decieves
The jester
just wants to please
The fairy
dances everywhere
While Rupunzal
let's down her hair.

The Leaders there
trying to take charge
While Mother works far too hard
The Oracle keeps the roof
With inner knowing
holding truth
Cinderalla washes clothes
as Ugly Sisters wash their toes
And Snow White
encased in glass
Alas not free at last
Joan of Arc
Is all but lost.
The Ice Queens heart
has turned to frost
Lady Luck brings no fortune
And Noahs wife
just steers the Ark
while tending a pair of doves.
The Oracle looks on from above.

Polly puts the kettle on
while poor Gretal
just eats crumbs
Dorothy
with shoes of red
Longs to be flown home
and put to bed.
Sleeping beauty has done her duty
While the Oracle guides them all
With a loving hand
she'll catch them
when they fall.
To scold
And criticise
She shows a view
with different eyes
She keeps them all in order.
And rearranges their disorder
For truth wins out
And will always win.
When the Oracle lies within.

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dimensions of a Woman" presents an interesting take on the various roles and archetypes that women are often portrayed as. The use of well-known characters and figures from literature and mythology adds depth and familiarity to the poem, allowing readers to easily understand the different dimensions being explored.

The overarching theme of the Oracle as a guiding force is well-executed, and the use of the Oracle as a unifying presence throughout the poem helps tie the various dimensions together. The language is simple and straightforward, making it easy for readers to follow along.

However, there are some areas where the poem could be improved. The use of cliches, such as "Lady Luck brings no fortune," detracts from the originality of the poem. Additionally, some of the lines feel disjointed and don't flow smoothly from one to the next.

One suggested line edit would be to change "The Ice Queens heart has turned to frost" to "The Ice Queen's heart has frozen." This small change would improve the meter and flow of the line, and also avoid the use of the cliche "turned to frost."

Overall, "Dimensions of a Woman" is a thought-provoking poem that successfully explores the different roles and dimensions of women. With some minor improvements, it could become an even stronger piece of writing.

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looking to dicipher the properties of a woman, your title brought me in.
The pace and rhythm is good, but the language could use a little bit of work.
I found that the rhymes of [order and disorder], just a little bit distracting.
Yeah, the words rhyme, but it seems like they were just thrown together to make a rhyme.
I like the theme, it could have so many different meanings, and the Oracle might be women in general?
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