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Different Titles

Do titles really make a difference?
The "I" child had ne'er honestly thought so.
And, if that's true, what is the damn reference?
My mom says: "we're all born the same, you know!

I grew then older, and things start to change.
Some are that rich, some have nothing to eat.
Some wear the silk, some had to rearrange.
Some live on the trash, others enjoy their meat.

Then years went by, with wider open eyes.
I stared to understand how things go 'round.
I saw the poor enthralled-with babies' cries,
while greedy kings disguised- with titles crowned.

We aren't all the same, a fact that might stink,
titles make some life's black, some are tickled pink.

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What did you think of my title?
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Teddy, I know the title's long ....LOL Stan, I chose a line from the body for the title.. does it work? Gee, did you expect to use that title in this certain way? Alan, I am not so happy with my volta. It is an extend of the second stanza rather than a turn at line 9. Lavender, has the theme appeal to you?
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Strong wrds but so meaningful. It's a matter of the haves and have nots

somethings will never change
beautiful write full of meaning

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Yeah, I too thought the content might be a bit hard to digest (metaphorically speaking), but it's the fact of how things go around these days
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You could shorten the title to "Different Titles". That would kinda compile the reader to discover what kind of titles

You're right. I like your title.
Thank you.

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Dear dear Rula, I absolutely love this. It's true that some of us live much better than others when we are all human beings, In the UK we have the queen, I often thought when I was a child "what it must be like in her house"

Now your title? It's not long but I would have called this

"the king and I"

your work is truly wonderful Rula I don't mean to break your tennis balls.
you have one typo as I can see. Stared that should be started ?

Thank you...Teddy

Sorry that I didn't earlier answer your question about stared/started thing. I meant it to be "stared" , do you think it works?

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it's my pleasure, my personal opinion is that it would read clearer as (started) or (searched)
as what i think you are trying to say is you were looking to find the answere.

I started to understand how things go round ---- or ---- i searched to understand how things go round

Thank you...Teddy

It really pleases me to know that you like it. In fact I have already shortened the title going with Stan's advice. I like your suggestion too, it is inspirational in a way, but I wanted to show how titles make the difference.
Thank you so much dear. It means a lot to have you commenting and the others.

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The title works very well now, and this is a wonderful discussion poem.

Thank you...Teddy

Hi, Rula,
I thought I commented on this poem immediately, but see now it didn't take for some reason. I am having computer issues. So sorry! I think your theme is extremely appealing, especially for the time we are going through now. For me, personally, it's a painful, but remarkable growing period, and your poem directly speaks of the growth we must do ourselves to open our eyes. Your last two lines have a nice play on words, but a strong sense of reality.
Thank you!
L

Please no need to apologise. We are all familiar with computer's tricks. I can't thank you for your appreciation.
You're absolutely right about what you said about the period we're going through. Hopefully people will come out more aware of how things go.
Can't thank you enough for your kind visit dear.

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