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The Death of Hatred

I told my hatred
to kick the bucket.
Long has it been,
a pest, it seems,
refusing to give in.
forgiving a sin.

It spat and hissed.
"You have a right
to be pissed!"
so says the blight
who flashed to me
the reasons to be
angry.

Common sense intervened
and I stood my ground.
With hatred, the devil wins
my lost peace won't be found.
Thus I stabbed its heart
with blades of wisdom
and tore it apart.

I crumpled and tossed it
into the trash bin of yesterday.
I took a deep breath of relief.
''Good riddance!" I say!

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Liked this piece a kick in the teeth for self doubt, and well written.
Hope you are well and that the success in your writing continues.
You take care and know we love to walk with you, Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I'm feeling fine and very pleased that I have the honor to be one of the malay poets representing my country in a malay poetry compilation book that has just been published.

Alid

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