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BEFORE THE DAWN

Submitted by Inky-penky on Sun, 2018-05-20 11:28

Before the dawn
Thinking of the world
Looking upto god
For a way forward
To be a man of my word
And build a world in my hood

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

raj

Sun, 2018-05-20 14:23

I went through your profile and find that you are a student and would like to write good poetry. For that to happen, you need to post/ attempt more poems and also read and comment on those posted by others. I still consider myself to be on a learning curve and reading poems of others is a good addition in that process.

I notice that this is only your second poem posted that too after posting the first in November for which Kelsey has provided good comments. Actually that poem about soldiers you can now enter in the ongoing contest.

keep writing and reading works of others. Also participate in workshops.

Best wishes...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Inky-penky

Wed, 2018-11-21 13:22

Inky-penky's picture

So sorry I wasn't able to reply your comment sir. I really appreciate your comment sir, thank you very much for that. I will upload more poems soon. I have alot of poems in written which am gonna upload soonest. Thanks a lot sir, I really appreciate.

Inky-penky

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