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Culture Vultures
whats hot to be got
keyhole behind the polls
controls what one knows
slave tactics
ratchet bracket
web analytics
phony statistics
a bucket of sh**t
land of milk & honey
blinded grind
underwater minds
statue of Liberty
we're not free
men in black suits
controls the loot
trampled dogs n bunnies
divided the poor
taxed middle-class a**es
leave earth
head to Mars
we don't need human stars
they're given too much control
it's in the music
and films.
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dpoetessrock
Sun, 2019-03-24 19:36
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author commentEumolpus
Mon, 2019-03-25 03:13
Sounds like a poem
Looks like a poem and is a poem.
Firstly in a world where the president (the chosen by god according to his press secretary) uses the word shit commonly. I think not spelling it out is a distraction on 2019. Best to use a different word. Same with ass.
I am not getting a clear message here. Men in black was a great film, but why are we not free? Why are middle class asses? What’s in the music and films.
Perhaps you wrote a poem about yourself you might begin to discover poetic truths not random cliche. That is the best place to start
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Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
dpoetessrock
Mon, 2019-03-25 03:24
Thank you
Thank you
author commentGeezer
Mon, 2019-03-25 15:20
Are the men in black...
supposed to be the business people of the world? The rich and famous? I agree that you should either spell the words out or use different words, it is a distraction. Ok, typos:
1} What['s],
2} control no [s]
3} divide no [d]
4} tax[ing] middle-class
So glad that you have decided to stick around, I'm anxious to see you improve! ~ Geezer.
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