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The crown

evening is a germ gem
that albeit corroborates the crowns perdition
rain buds are soft on child skin
abducted pride equinox

sacrifice..........to universe
diamond dispositions forged fickle of anxiety
grafted on the ranks an epaulette
dermis of a sullen sun domineering

a paper crown this be an equivocation
draining man, myriad salmons to bathe
rationing blood-streams quest
infinite presence from pressed
in the bleak orange county
telegram earths unsung telepathic
tarmac writhe, toe poke wraith
ablution travel guide clime
slime vicarious entourage of hike
shadows pending spectrum's verdict brief

for they must travel......crammed pale breeds
brood charge for brigade throb
like earths drumsticks infinitesimal
the picturesque man, and his voice

patina repose faithless ill of indifference
a paper crown in catalogue, chaff driven
daunting of reprieved joy toothless
gloom sparse sliver cross-country
from dew's precipitation; to tormented heavens
and earths fall, blindfolded break start
white pate priest- the miracle, that

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Comments

it will add to the sense of narrative.

cheers,
Jess
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