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To The Class Clown

In your absence,
the classroom is filled with an air of melancholy
Each lesson seems to stretch for an eternity.....
Without your cheerful presence,
boredom creeps in
Even the teachers could sense
something is missing
We all miss your jokes and your laughters.
I hope you will return to school soon
as it is never the same without you....

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A funny piece indeed. I see that you write more from your childhood memories, which is something I really wish to do but always fail.
Keep them coming...Tell us more about your world..

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I like to say that it is all happy and nice but the truth is I have been bullied many times in school in my younger days.What i am doing here is trying to bring out the good times to remind myself that it is not all bad. At one point I got so fed up that
I faced up to one of them. Yap I got detention for it but strangely, he treats me like a friend after that.
I have some suggestions.if you want to write about your childhood, remember the good times like your most memorable time with your family or friends, what you dream to be at that time, what you used to do, hobbies.maybe your religious lessons and how it shaped you.An incident that you can remember. They don't have to be happy, Rula. As long as you can remember them, let the words flow. Let writing about them be a form of theraphy. Accept them as they are, the past that can be a lesson shared. We are who we are today because of the people and the experience in our lives. Hmm. I am one to talk , aren't I? Even i find it hard sometimes.you see, I write mostly in malay, so this is my way to reach out and improve. I do write about the dark side of humans too. Things that i and my friends have experienced.sometimes though,its my own feelings about, for example, child prostitution and war.

Go on, try it out. I failed sometimes too, but I am sure the people here can help you out.

All the best,
Alid

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You have a good message Alidzain regarding writing about childhood and how others shape our lives and thinking...I will try out something on those lines....thanks for the message

raj (sublime_ocean)

Khalid you've faced some bad times, (in fact we all do in a way or another, aren't we ) yet I am happy you could bring something good out of the bad.
Thanks for the tips, too

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Happy to be able to help.

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I liked this write, a memory of something missing that day.
It is hard when a child if you live in a place that changes so fast and at the whims of others.
I have been very lucky in that area, my childhood was of beauty, but in your piece, even one child that gave you laughter was missed with such a feeling of loss.
That you retain these memories is good but they have to be sorted into cause and effect, the things that moulded you into what you became or are reaching out to be, the clown is a beacon of light for you, never let it go.
Write as you do from your memories or whatever but now just go for the various forms of writing poetry to enhance your skills..
Yours Ian.T

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