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Church Organ

Blaring noises ring
Causing a fantastic dance.
For it's a great king.

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Structured: Eastern
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A little poke at Haiku! :)
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I need fifty lines just get speed up. I will say this though, I was able to see multiple perspectives in this. I think (?) that's an indication of a successful haiku. I saw it from a humorous direction and could turn around and see a serious. Curious. wesley

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A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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very unusual and very effective. A poke it may be, but it works.

cheers,
Jess
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