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Christmas Time
Christmas time is here!
Our hearts are full of cheer!
Baking pie with mom tonight,
while Santa makes his flight.
Decorating trees!
We worship on our knees.
Our Savior loves us without end,
our cuts and scars He'll mend!
Our stocking Nick will fill,
our agony he'll kill.
We pray to God throughout the night,
that He will cleanse our sight.
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It's better if you sing it to the tune of the song, " Christmas Time is Here!"
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scribbler
Wed, 2011-12-21 20:33
hello
Welcome to neopoet. A nice poem for this time of year . Have you considered breaking it into stanzas? If you have questions about site or how to navigate here you can ask any member. A greeter-advocate will be contacting you here soon to also offer any assistance you might need. So again welcome and enjoy your time here. There are many very good poets here of all different types so I'm sure you will find some inspiration and gain in your craft.........stan
the_fool
Thu, 2011-12-22 04:24
o, the holidays
very cute and the rhymes didn't sound forced at all, which is not easy to do. tempo seemed a little off on a few lines but that's easily fixed.
keep 'em coming!