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Chamber Thoughts

Submitted by William Saint George on Mon, 2014-02-03 05:02

I did not mean to think of you
after all these quiet days,
yet when embraced
by loneliness
I could not help
but ask you why
the door stays shut,
the curtains drawn
like nightfall's shades
and your picture still hangs up
on my wall.

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Free verse
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Poem

Mon, 2014-02-03 06:40

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Hi William,

Just loved your poem. That's what I feel when I think of my someone special. :)

Cheers,

Kavi

William Saint George

Mon, 2014-02-03 07:17

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Thanks Kavi. I was thinking about someone special when I wrote this.

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Poem

Mon, 2014-02-03 09:16

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Your welcome.....Looking forward for more such poems :)

Cheers,
Kavi

raj

Mon, 2014-02-03 07:47

The two comments from you and Kavita are but a confirmation that when you write your thoughts about someone special they pour out as wonderfully as you have done...thanks for posting..

regards,

raj

raj (sublime_ocean)

William Saint George

Mon, 2014-02-03 08:34

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Thanks for reading it too.

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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alidzain

Mon, 2014-02-03 18:47

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love it when its straight from the heart. Can I have more of this type of poem please?

Alid

William Saint George

Tue, 2014-02-04 09:26

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Most of my recent poetry has taken this character. You're sure to see more of this. Thanks for reading :)

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

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Race_9togo

Mon, 2014-02-03 22:37

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Not a single thing wrong with this, just wanted to say most very well done.

Respectfully, Race

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William Saint George

Tue, 2014-02-04 09:27

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Thanks for reading this poem.

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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Rula

Tue, 2014-02-04 01:30

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beautifully done with tons of honest feelings.
I wonder how can anyone resist opening the champer's door after reading this
and the ending:
"and your picture still hangs up
on my wall"
works just perfect. :)
Bravo!!!

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William Saint George

Tue, 2014-02-04 09:27

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Thanks Rula :)

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

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