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C#-tis Interruptus

Submitted by Pixelated on Mon, 2019-11-18 11:16

All right, let's knock this assignment out
*looks at obsidian screen*
What a nice contrast with that neon green font
*cracks knuckles, and begins to type*

XmlDocument xml = new XmlDocument();

Dang fly, get out of here!
*lyrics of Monster by Mumford and Sons crosses mind*
Music! That's what I forgot! Let's fire up Spotify...
*sings along with song*
What was I doing? Right. Homework. OK

XmlDocument xml = new XmlDocument();
xml.LoadXml(str); // suppose that str string contains "<Names>...

This daggum fly! Land, so I can get you. Land! That's it! LAND!
Easy, easy, SPLAT!
*Wipes hands on jeans*

You know, I haven't watched a Few Good Men in a while
YOU CAN'T HANDLE THE TRUTH!
*daydreams about rifle drills*
Look at all those Marines in their smart uniforms
Sunlight bouncing off that polished M1 Garand like it's hitting a force field
OOO-RAH!
Dang it. I need to do this homework!
*cracks neck* OK

XmlDocument xml = new XmlDocument();
xml.LoadXml(str); // suppose that str string contains "<Names>...</Names>"

Mreeow? Rowr-rowr-rowr?
Grey fluff hops into my lap.
There goes any hope of assignment being done soon.....

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
11/19 Edit: Took out a lot of the code as suggested. Tightened up some of the flow. Took out a couple action pieces as I felt it was overkill. The coding isn't a typo. It's C# for how to select XML nodes by Attribute and were purposefully inserted. No flies were hurt during the writing of this poem.
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

Comments

Geezer

Mon, 2019-11-18 12:19

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we have some humor here! I liked it, but could have done with just little bit less of code. Not to say get rid of it all, but leave just enough to give the idea. I have the same problems in getting started sometimes. My wife says that I am a procrastinator, but I think that such a big word should be left to
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scribbler

Mon, 2019-11-18 22:30

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I could not even begin to write code whatever That is lol. So it might be a good idea to minimize it in your poem incase there are still a lot of luddites like me around . Other than that this is a good slice of life including the fly........stan

Pixelated

Tue, 2019-11-19 11:05

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I agree that there's too much code. I'm also not happy with the flow - there are some sections that are a little jumpy. A work in progress!

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