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When a jinx is broken
Something new takes its place
From the awards so far taken
The worth puts smiles on a face
Retarded energy draws them back
Till a jinx puts a stop to it

When a jinx is broken
Shattered shackles of slavery
That held captives to be beaten
Now testify to their bravery
Ill luck suffered setback
A jinx put an end to it

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...this piece, t. rex.! I did enjoy reading this, it had a strange way of appealing to my instincts. Overall, I believe that you did a rather "stellar" job on this effort.
Thanx, for that;

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I am experimenting on new forms, the caption got into my head and the jinx that blocked me is broken. Thank you for your comments and for the appeal to your instinct, best wishes.


A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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I like it. That's all. No complaints, no suggestions, just like it. wesley

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i am glad you like this one, I have been experimenting on new forms lately. Best wishes


A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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