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the breath

In a moment, all time seems to stand still
the question speeds through your head, am i going to see tomorrow
And you realize the answer is in your hands
In slow motion, your worst fear becomes the worlds reality
the sound echos as you try to form a single thought
the rush of fear takes over like a demon casting a spell
That last moment, last breath of the reality you once knew

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I would use line breaks for your sentences ( each thought or wherever you would use a comma break to a new line) This poem reads like a suicide?

Chrys

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