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Brand Stand:

Life, Liberty and

Pursuit of Happiness grand

If followed in land

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Ideals lost when separated by I (ego) and deals (big business) have a detrimental impact on the ability of leading lights to be moral compasses to others.
Editing stage: 

Comments

Life, Liberty and
Pursuit of Happiness grand
was followed till banned
In your dread of dictators
you made class traitors
job creators all dictators
no rights for waiters
every financier a dictator
no such thing as liberty
every private employer a dictator
wage slave captivity
workers at their mercy
no public responsibility
this defeat of all government,
betrays all class empowerment
you have set up a monstrous idol in bronze
which you call Liberty
which symbolises massive cons
keeping workers from activity
in a nationwide mental illness,
PMPD
Post Macarthyist Paranoia Disorder
Most simply cannot see
so traumatised by the Macarthyism witch-hunts
it so destroyed their belief in a land of liberty
that the cognitive dissonance caused
generational psychic scarring
and eternal addiction to warring.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

Jess, both your review responses are worthy of posting as your poem entries. You have well won word warrior worth Weirdelf.

author comment

I enjoy engaging with you.
You have a poet's mind and craft.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

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