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Beyond

Submitted by riotface97 on Fri, 2016-07-22 13:56

The only reason
i'm still here
is for you.

Don't tell me this has been done before
in Shakespeare
in romanticism
in the world
for I would easily tie a rope
around my own neck
not to be here anymore.

You can call that cliche
until you're standing by the grave
of a young man
yet to experience the world
have the audacity to
call it cliche then.

I am fine.

Repeat it day after day
until you are not anymore
yes,
I still appreciate the sunshine
and the smile of a stranger.

But it's just not enough
to keep me here.

I'm so, so sorry

Help the inward cries
of the youth
not yet experienced enough
to live.

Please

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Esker

Fri, 2016-07-22 21:41

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and move on
a higher call
motive too exist

cya..cover your ass

how we still exist
as a race

put our beauty on our cave
walls in france and spain
spread our genes
to far reaches
and trade goods
with conquerers
they will be back
..
excellent poem and voice

Sparrow

Sat, 2016-07-23 04:15

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A cry of need, yet there is always a need to accept the challenge of life as raw as it becomes, just like a fairground ride up, and down, slowly rising up to dash down, moods and feelings enmeshed in all things around.
Learn to feel everything in its correct brush with your emotions.
If the feelings are not good then learn from them as a child learns of how not to touch hot things, where they increase their sensitivity to become aware of changes.
I think you can take out Shakespeare as the line is redundant, otherwise a good write..
Yours Ian..

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