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Soft breeze
carrying fat bees.
Their bums dusted in pollen,
leaving yellow blobs on cotton
as the laundry waves at passers by.

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The imagery in your poem "Bees" is vivid and evocative, painting a charming picture of bees going about their work. The use of sensory details like the fat bees dusted in pollen and leaving yellow blobs on cotton creates a strong visual for the reader. However, consider exploring more depth in your poem by delving into the significance or symbolism of the bees and their actions. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying the rhythm or structure of your lines to add more dynamism to your piece.

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Quirky,,, Original,,, "Simple"
but its not Simple is it,
it makes me smile!


I'm glad it made you smile!

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but effective! I saw the sunshine, the laundry blowing in the breeze, with yellow bumble bee butt imprints, on the white cotton sheets. Nice stuff, Geez.

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Hello, Katy Louise,
A beautiful observational poem. It feels freeing, and gives me pause. I enjoyed this. I also like your title - simple and says it all.
Thank you!

Thank you!

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