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Because Kites Have Strings

It feels like
you let me go,

like a kite
in the wind.

The sky is so vast,
a canvas of clouds,

of goodness
and ghosts,

I would love
to meet
and meld with.

I feel free
for a while;

like I’m going
finally
forward.

Until I realize,
with a jerk,

you still hold the string
of my heart.

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Really nice image. Ends great.

to be somewhat consistent, by all means, drop the first stanza. It makes no sense, (what’s an “expanse) ,spoils the end which would be a nice surprise having set up the image of the kite, and is confusing since she still is holding the string, you are not let go .

Baring the first stanza this is a really fine well crafted work. Please begin “ like a kite”...breaking the rule never start a line with “like” but to me it works here

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

spot on with his feedback.
I like this too. Could work perfectly for March Contest.
Awesome!

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Think you had a really nice balance here. Nicely done - Good poem.

Cheers
Anni

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they gave good advice, nothing I could add. ~ Geezer.
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