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Beaming Joy ( Exploration style, subject, critique WS)

Sun beams through crystal
a dioptrical rainbow
a marked refraction

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Structured: Eastern
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A lovely haiku.... but I don't pick your subject.... so I went back and see it is 'dish' .... sorry, but I don't picture one.... am I supposed to? Or am I missing something?

still, a very descriptive write
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Crystal is an indirect citation of the dish though I agree it could be a glass or anything else.

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I saw a candy bowl.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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I wanted to create a joyful, colorful little piece.

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While the inference was not directly clear, I can make the connection between the subject and the haiku.

My only concern was the last line, "fraction" just doesn't feel right. I would try to work "refraction" into the line.

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Jonathan Moore

Edits done.

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