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Be Mine (proposal)

YOU might not be
as pretty
as some singers
nor shiny
as Hollywood stars

I might not be
as rich as Gates
nor genius
as Einstein

But I want to be yours
and you to be mine

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I can't sing very well but the intelligence is ok, I thought I asked you not to talk about it yet lol.
This piece of yours needs a little work the theme is good, though the execution is not so good, the flow using those names didn't work, the Gates caused a problem there are a few more rich one to choose from that will fit the bill, then you could find two that compliment each other.
Take care young Lady and know you are in our thoughts, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

interesting comment. when I composed this, an image inspired. I am not sure what other names might be less problematic as no structure is intended here. it is intended to be free more than structured though it rhymed by the end.
Would appreciate some suggestions.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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simple and effective
some might say hallmarky,
- but elite hallmark i'd say
:)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

elite Hallmark .
I think I'll start a business.
Would you share me? 50-50 :)
No offence intended

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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depends on if it's a typo on your behalf
50-5 or 50-50 ??
:)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Corrected ..Will you now

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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absolutely xx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Have you ever read my profile ?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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either I misunderstood your comment or you misunderstood my piece .
Don't worry. I am so happy you've dropped by, enjoyed the lines and left the comment .
Have a nice day...

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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duplicated

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

author comment

a misunderstanding from my end as i said.Appreciate your words and the clarification :)
Thank you

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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You know I don't do much free verse so my opinions about them don't count for much. But I read over this 3-4 times and couldn't find anything I'd change...........stan

for me every comment counts and i know you'd not spare to offer any
Thank you

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Sweet story.

Love Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

The full story isn't written yet, just a proposal for marraige though it is nothing of my culture, I liked to try something as inspired by a picture as I said to Ian . Hope you are well
Thanks for dropping by .

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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