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Be It What It May

Everest Mountain
Some climb to reach the summit
Some are left behind or wrecked

For aspiring dreams
We chase you to win or lose
Tommorow I will be here.

Thank you to sir Alan S. Jeeves for all the inspiring titles.

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The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the same subject from differing perspectives.
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And so to the mountain I will climb! Dreams come true every day.

Gorgeous, Rula.

Was such a great challenge

five seven seven
Another new form for me to consider
Well done!

Thank you...Teddy

Always great to find you her, such a great poetry mate to read and value my words.
Thank you for the heads up too !

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Rula for rising to the challenge so well. I see I fine piece here and compliment you.

If I may delicately make a suggestion ~ K2, L1 might benefit slightly from the addition of one more syllable.
As an example lets say: 'For aspiring dreams'.

A most enjoyable read for our first day of the month.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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Your compliment is priceless. Your suggestion is valid too. I'm sure though as well as my dear readers that Everest can be pronounced as three syllables [Ev-er-ist] or two syllables [Ev-rist], but I'm taking a master's suggestion with pleasure.
Many thanks

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Yes Rula Two or three syllables?
I think that Everest should remain as three syllables just as you have it. Your piece is just right now I am sure.
Your poem is a delight to behold (I wanted to say that before anyone else does).

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appreciate your kindness sir!
I must say it was great fun to use your twisted titles
Than you.

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Hi, Rula,
Another inspiring poem. What other way to express the great challenge of Everest than through the hard work of a challenging poetry form. Both your theme and form bring out the best in one another.
Thank you!
L

Comment is true an insignia on my page dear.Thank you!

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Nice couplet of Haikus/Senryus as the case may be

hope all is well...i am back here after a while...

be well...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Wow! Thanks for coming back. You and your works were missed by everyone here.
Thanks for reading my first attempt at katautas.I am sure you would like to try it one day.
Welcome back.

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Tell me about the katautas form....may be i might then try it...

take best care...

raj (sublime_ocean)

you can find all about it in the last few words.
Looking forward to reading yours.

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now i am confused between katuka and sedoka :)

be well dear friend..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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