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To be happy.

Yes, really happy,
Gratuitous, unearned happiness
Yes I am happy.

It shakes me to my core
Perhaps frisson or tremble is a better word

It is rare
It is precious
I am delighted

And…
Above all
Perhaps the perfect thing,

I don’t fear its inevitable ending.

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A simple piece that carries a mood that I hope is infectious,
It is great to be happy, we shall not worry about it's inevitable end we will enjoy it while it is here,
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

but as far as I know happiness doesn't spread herpes or aids yet. No doubt the Chemical Warfare branch of the Catholic church is working on it.

cheers,
Jess
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sense of improved humor
I thought you only used
a guillotine
to practice on my neck

but happiness can be contagious
if it makes any difference

loved

That Lonnie what is he on about Tail is that a typo or what????
Oxtail soup now there's a nice piece of tail, I wish he wouldn't talk in riddles there are enough vague poetic statements here as it is.
I was thinking about age things this morning like kisses, memory and many other things that become vague, I hope someone would let me know what happened to all those simply nice things I have a vague recollection of, even smiling LOL.
Take care Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

though I presume you read the last line.

cheers,
Jess
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Good for you.
I'd re-arrange the first three lines with a few changes for a more logical consistancy.

Yes, I am happy.
 Really happy!
( A)Gratuitous, unearned happiness
..............I liked the word "gratuitious"

You make me feel happy too  

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❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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I am unclear about your suggestions

cheers,
Jess
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after using the advanced formating

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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thanks.

Something interesting. Do you realise there was more a political/ideological content in that suggestion than a poetical one?

cheers,
Jess
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I only cared for the logical consistancy when I suggested the re-arrangement of those lines

You might like to tell me how!

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Glad to see the mood change, and I hope it brings you more peace of mind!

seems a strange incongruency to work for peace of mind,eh

cheers,
Jess
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You mean as opposed to a piece of tail? LOL!!

Indeed.

Joy is infectious. I am delirious.

~

As an intrinsic atheist as I am I knew we had a connection.

cheers,
Jess
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a dazzler!

thank you!

Interesting to see you have a mild emotional side, I am interested to see more writing of this nature from you.
"The cat is out of the bag!"

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

yeah, it's quite a big change for me. Maybe even more to come,

cheers,
Jess
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