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I saw the first of them today.
Little flashes of yellow riding
the breeze across in front of me.
Migration from tree to ground has begun.
Soon now this back road will be covered.
Leaping into the swirling air as I pass by.
An orange and red and yellow announcement.
Fall has returned.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Seems that you are fascinated by the flashing colored lights.

If this was mine, I would make a littlt tweek in the last line,

"An orange and red and yellow announcement

Fall has returned."

So, I'd say
An orange and red and yellow announcing
the return of fall
or look even for a fresher word than "return"

Only thoughts.


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Perhaps I missed the subtext.

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