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The Art of Heart [Title workshop]

How would an art
be an art
if it hurts,
if it doesn't bring
a heart to a heart,
if it doesn't stop
a war, or if it gets
a war to start?

Poets aren't just
dream-makers, but
rather the successors
of messengers,

With their
messages poets
can bring the whole
humanity
together
with a clean pen
and a clean heart.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I have many titles in mind... Let's see whose will match with my thoughts. I have to admit though that I am happy with mine. LoL
Editing stage: 
Workshop: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

it's not a suprise to see you write this as you do have a pure heart in your poetry, i am loving your message that its important to stand up and be counted for what ever we believe in and also true to use ink to show it!

now your first verse

How would an art
be an art
if it hurts, in my opinion this line would be stonger as (if it didn't hurt) i believe most artists hurt in some way.
if it doesn't bring
a heart to a heart,
if it doesn't stop
a war, or if it gets
a war to start?

anyway im the first so wait for others and hear what their opinion would be.

once again you cheer my day with your presence!

Thank you...Teddy

Your suggestions are always welcome, but my line supposed to say that (poetry) as an art should only bring the good to humanity and life.
I don't see how artists hurt, or do you mean are hurt?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Oh that makes sence
I find most true artists hurt or have something inside them that makes them the best at what they do.
i am thinking of Van Gogh as an example, but thats just what i think. and i now underdstand more your question

heres my thought just to help you (i hope) if not please just ignore me!

How would an art be an art
If it hurts?
if it doesn’t bring a heart to a heart
if it doesn’t stop a war?
What if it gets a war to start?

i see so much in this write and i only wish everything we read brought hearts to hearts!

heres my thought on a new title

the art of positivity (or even) the art of possibility

Thank you...Teddy

Hi dear Rula
please excuse me for going into semantics, I do not if I am right it is just my feeling. In your title I feel heart is the subject and art the modifier, whereas in -the heart of art- I feel art is the subject and heart the modifier.
Since we are talking about titles what came to me was the purity of art, with art the subject and purity the modifier.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
I'm not sure I'm getting your point. By titling "The Art of Heart", I wanted to say that poetry is not any art but the art of love (as heart usually the symbol of love)
Now does that in your opinion contradict with the title in any way?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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author comment

While I cannot agree that poetry should always bring good to the reader, I will admit that the [Art] of the heart should be about how good [or bad] the writer brings the heart to the reader. Nice job of illustrating that the heart is touched by what we write. ~ Geezer.
.

Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

With their
messages poets
CAN bring the whole
humanity
together
with a CLEAR pen
and a OPEN heart.

SOME LOVE BLACK ART
What now thou sayest
of ARCHAIC harts
like butter jam tarts
poets have now gone off track
sad

all want a NOBEL
Four *** POETIC HEART
What of art
not many read poetry today
visit other sites
all *** display
poets galore
to make money*** more

You got through to my message. So I would take this as a yes to the title?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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author comment

is the word. I think the title fits perfectly. ~ Geezer.
.

Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

Since this is the poem which you think could use a stronger/different title I'd suggest "POET'S PURPOSE"

Wow Stan I do love your choice of title
Poets purpose

Thank you...Teddy

thank you Stan for the suggestion and teddy for the approval.
Are we supposed to edit the titles immediately as suggested?

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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author comment

In fact you don't even Have to use Any of the titles . But any one of the suggestions if not used Might just inspire a new title of your own

good question sweet heart, i havent yet because i have been hoping for more brain on mine, as i am new to workshop i am every time learning. so please come as a "women"s view to tell your idea of a title for one of my most loved poems by me!
its 10 years old.

Thank you...Teddy

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