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Answer me

I am ready to take you to on a long drive my love,

I am ready to leave my whole work for you,

I am going to ride you in expensive car love,

Woah oh ho say something for me,

Will you sit in my car love?

Woah oh ho say something will you go on a ride with me?

Woah oh ho...

Listen to me I am telling you the truth that I can feel good vibes,

Will you accept my apologies? Let me make you my wife,

Woah oh ho say yes or no will you accept my apology,

Woah oh ho say yes or no will you be wife,

Woah oh ho say something my life

Woah oh ho...

Will take you for a date,

Will celebrate with you, buy you a cake,

Don't worry about anything,

I can manage so many things,

I'll will buy you a pair of earnings,

I'll say your name all the time,

Will you be mine?

Say woah oh ho with me,

Say yes or no will you stay with me...

Will you say Schrey with me,

Woah oh ho say Yes or No baby!!!

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Comments

Thanks. It was really helpful.

Schrey
Life is so small so do something special.

author comment

So I need to ask, am I missing something here?
If not then WTF?
Confused...

THE MARK
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If you take the time to read a poem then take the time to let the author know you were there. Study it and form an opinion as well, even if it means going back to it more than once. That is basic critique, what Neopoet is all about.

Hi Schrey, welcome to Neopoet, here we help eachother with our posts. I think Terry has already pointed out important bits. I agree. This does sound as if it were written as lyrics for rap, is that so?
Hope you come back, as I'm confused. All the best, Gracy

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