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Answer me

I am ready to take you to on a long drive my love,

I am ready to leave my whole work for you,

I am going to ride you in expensive car love,

Woah oh ho say something for me,

Will you sit in my car love?

Woah oh ho say something will you go on a ride with me?

Woah oh ho...

Listen to me I am telling you the truth that I can feel good vibes,

Will you accept my apologies? Let me make you my wife,

Woah oh ho say yes or no will you accept my apology,

Woah oh ho say yes or no will you be wife,

Woah oh ho say something my life

Woah oh ho...

Will take you for a date,

Will celebrate with you, buy you a cake,

Don't worry about anything,

I can manage so many things,

I'll will buy you a pair of earnings,

I'll say your name all the time,

Will you be mine?

Say woah oh ho with me,

Say yes or no will you stay with me...

Will you say Schrey with me,

Woah oh ho say Yes or No baby!!!

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a big warm welcome to Neopoet,

i have read your first post which to me seems like an invitation for a lady friend to join you as your passenger and wife. here at neopoet we are a workshop which means we read and then leave reviews of maybe how we can improve our poems, today after reading this i wanted to leave you some notes pointing out the things i did not understand but of course would like to help make this better. here are my thoughts

I am ready to take you on a long drive my love,
I am ready to left my whole work for you, ---- I don’t know what you want to say here ?
I am going to ride you in my expensive car my love, ------ added (my)
Woah oh ho say something for me,
Will you sit in my car my love?
Woah oh ho say something will you go on a ride with me?
Woah oh ho...
Listen to me I am telling you the truth that I can feel good vibe(s), ?
Will you accept my apologies? Let me make you my wife,
Woah oh ho say yes or no will you accept my apology,
Woah oh ho say yes or no will you be wife,
Woah oh ho say something my life
Woah oh ho...
Will take you for a date,
Will celebrate with you, buy you a cake,
Don't worry about anything,
I can manage so many things,
I'll will buy you a pair of rings, ----I will buy you a ring?
I'll make song on you all the time, --- I will make songs of you all the time?
Will you be mine?
Say woah oh ho with me,
Say yes or no will you stay with me...
Will you Schrey with me, ---- you use your pen name here?
Woah oh ho say Yes or No baby!!!

i hope i have not overwhelmed you this morning, its a good start.

Thank you...Teddy

Thanks. It was really helpful.

Schrey

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So I need to ask, am I missing something here?
If not then WTF?
Confused...

Please comment anywhere anytime.

Hey Mark I got the impression that these are lyrics but I am sure we will be in the know soon. I'm not much into rap music I didn't even know that ho could mean that.

Thank you...Teddy

Hi Schrey, welcome to Neopoet, here we help eachother with our posts. I think Terry has already pointed out important bits. I agree. This does sound as if it were written as lyrics for rap, is that so?
Hope you come back, as I'm confused. All the best, Gracy

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