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alone

Represent it cause you’re in it,
don’t you love the way life lies?
Deep in the despair, rise in originality,
there dwells loneliness, it's embellished.

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ways that this can be taken. The only thing that I would change is the word [rise] I would use [risen]. ~ Geez.
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