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An Abdication:
Masquerade undone
Illusive victory won
Moral power gone
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Uncommented
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2018-01-16 01:40
This is a total success in your self-imposed rigid genre.
The 'Last few words' were un-needed, your eight words said it.
cheers,
Jess
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OriginalRhyku
Wed, 2018-01-17 09:18
Last few words removed
Jess / Weirdelf
I have acceded to your fine review and appreciate your appreciation of my middling musings.
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