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1000 Words Contest : The Scream Edvard Munch

A pastel pose of horror;
hands clasped tight
around a gaunt face.
Wide eyed and pale skinned.

You were walking.
With friends? Strangers?
They walk ahead,
You scream alone.

A conflicted sky;
Burnt orange and scarlet reds.
Do you wail on natures behalf?
Or because the sky is bleeding?

You’ve been stolen twice by thieves
But many by artists
They take you from the torment
and give you different faces

Different forms, different purpose
Satire or humour
But they always keep the sky
I guess that’s why you keep on screeching

Can your hands cover the screams of the sky,
Or do you overpower it with your own?
The water contorts about your being
And your spine echoes its bend.

Hush and trust in the blue chalk;
It holds back the tumultuous reds.
The sky won’t spread its embers,
If you stop screaming.

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Not my best but I did try and interpret the painting in my own way x :)
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Not keen on the picture but the poem has said it all,
A tightly packed write with colours the picture will scream back at,
Yours as always Ian, xx

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It's not one of my favourites either but it was the first that came to mind :)
Thanks you x

Not all those who wander are lost - JR Tolkien

- Tyjana :)

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you didn't put all the emphasis on the screamer, you covered the sky and the water. You made reference to the times that the painting has been stolen, [definitely part of its' history] and the way that it has been utilized in the advertising industry. A very nice job all around! ~ Gee.
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Thank you!!! :) I'm really glad you liked it! I researched the history of the painting to check it didn't already have a story and I found out about the thefts and knew I had to include it!

Not all those who wander are lost - JR Tolkien

- Tyjana :)

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young PH
hope you get the PRIZE
NO SURPRISE

GOOD you delve deep
at young age
make it a habit
well done

Thank you, I did read yours and I really liked the point of view in landscape x
I think there are a lot of amazing poems in the contest and yours are equally likely to win!
I'll try and post more often :)

Not all those who wander are lost - JR Tolkien

- Tyjana :)

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I never win
I only participate

like well done red green the winner
as always
ask stan you may
thanks any way
nice you read it too

Sorry I don't understand?

Not all those who wander are lost - JR Tolkien

- Tyjana :)

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one is RED
the other Green
that is they wear those coloured cotton belts

I was always green
and they ALWAYS would say
well done green
RED the winner
hope now u have seen
To a boxing bout
have you ever been

Are you sure it's red and Green???
I have always known that there is a red corner and a blue corner.
Is the green the place boxers lay on when they have lost KO,
Take care young Loved, I watch over some of the flock as to watch over them all would take too long..
Yours as always, Sparrow, cheep, cheep.

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