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“Stars make everything”
Stars make everything, do they not?
As they never die, they forever live to
create cusps in time with their glitter-
exploding silently, just for a moment’s sake.
From staring contests to unseen phenomena,
the stars shoot through flesh
to bring forth frisson, and whatever else
has been missing.
Together, galaxies intersect internally
and become a wondrous monogamy
through one, sudden burst-
Stars do make everything.
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Wed, 2024-05-01 19:50
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Stars make everything" explores the enduring nature and impact of stars on the universe. The imagery of stars creating cusps in time with their glitter and exploding silently is captivating. The juxtaposition of staring contests and unseen phenomena adds depth to the poem, highlighting the dual aspects of stars that are both visible and mysterious. The idea of stars shooting through flesh to bring forth frisson and fill a void is thought-provoking. The concept of galaxies intersecting internally and forming a wondrous monogamy through a sudden burst is intriguing. The repetition of the phrase "Stars do make everything" reinforces the central theme of the poem. Consider refining the structure and flow of the poem to enhance its impact further. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices such as metaphors, similes, or enjambment could enrich the imagery and create a more dynamic reading experience.
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