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Dark Angel ...
Poets first poems
This is an early piece from almost 20 years ago - rip it to bits (please)
You came to me you had the key
unlocked the fastened door;
I could not see the destiny
that lay upon my shore.
Your touch so sweet made me complete
you filled me to the core.
Angel, my Sweet Angel
you’ve been this way before?
I saw the pain in your refrain,
my heart went out for you.
Oh, how we shared and how we cared
hope reached out to rescue
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from shattered dreams here was a gleam
for both, long overdue!
Angel, my Sweet Angel
we’re caught in love's lasso?
We sang so bright into the night
our music touched the rafters.
The plans were made for our crusade
called "Happy-ever-afters",
Let love's sweet song sing loud and strong
no ending to our laughters.
O Angel my Sweet Angel
You queen of all spell-casters.
On empty dock I stand in shock
I know not where you went;
I can't hold fast against the blast,
your love from me was rent;
Please grasp my hand from this quicksand
I fall in deep descent.
Angel O Dark Angel
Your absence, my torment,
Your absence, my torment!
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- June 2026
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01 MonAnniversary
15 years of membership
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01 TueAnniversary
10 years of membership
- May 2019
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13 MonReceived a critique
on Dark Angel ... from @Eumolpus
"it has all the qualities of pop lyrics. Lot's of good rhyme, it's fairly transparent and direct, easy to follow, has some catchy phrases to work good with music. As a lyric it is for me as good as any out there what you…" -
12 SunReceived a critique
on Dark Angel ... from @Geezer
"I'm not sure that the title fits, but it isn't my memory. I don't see anything to change. [Maybe the title]. Your rhyme is flawless, and never sounds forced. I tried to find something to rip apart, but... ~ Geezer. ." -
11 SatFirst publication
Dark Angel ...
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01 WedJoined Neopoet
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First poem published 2901 days later.
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