"SANTA CESAREA" by:itzhak bareket.

....WE WANDERED DAY
    WE WANDERED NIGHT
    TILL WE ARRIVED IN TWILLIGHT
    TIME TO SANTA CESAREA...

           AN ITALIAN LITTLE TOWN
                 - SMALL   STREETS,
                        UPS AND   DOWNS-
                             SMALL HOUSES
                                       PLENTY   STORES.

    LITTLE   MERCHANTS
         -   GREAT   THIEWES-!
                   FISHERMEN,
    HIGH,MARVELOUS BLUE SKY.

                    S U N,
        LIKE FIRE IN THE SEA,
            AND   AMONG   ALL,
       JUST   Y O U   AND   ME !

                    S O,
       WHO CAN WISH
    AND ASK FOR MORE
        IN   SANTA CESAREA ?

we walked, DRINKING "locallo VINO ",
-RED,SWEET-BITTER "C E S A R I N O" -
           WE SANG AN"DANCED
     OUTSIDE, ON STREETS,
            AND WE INVENT,
     OUTSTANDING, UNIQUE DREANS,
        IN" S A N T A   CESAREA"....

                    S O,
      WHO   CAN    ASK
   AND   WISH   FOR   MORE
                   I N
       " S A N T A    C E S A R E A " ?

      NOT ME,NEITHER YOU,
   NOR   SOMEBODY
THAT LIKE TO DO
IN   S A N TA   C E S A R E A.....

— itzhak bareket, Jun 24, 2010

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Critiques

Morgana Tragic…

15 years 11 months ago

I like the images and theme

I like the images and theme of this poem. However, the structure itself makes it a little difficult to read. When you have everything capitalized, it feels like you are "yelling" the poem instead of simply writing or speaking it. And having it all over the page makes it look messy. Generally, stanzas should be centered left on the page. It just makes the poem easier to read and understand. Exclamations marks generally don't need to be used in poems. Personally, and this is just my opinion mind you, exclamation marks tend to get overused and unless you are really trying to emphasize on something then they really don't need to be used. You also put quotation marks in a few places where they didn't need to be. Quotation marks are only used when someone says something, titles of any kind, or quotes. Clean up the structure and grammar on this one. When it's easier to read, the content itself will be easier to critique. :) All the best. Peace "If it wasn't for all of your torture I wouldn't know how to be this way now, never back down you tried to hide your lies disguise yourself through living in denial but in the end YOU WON'T STOP ME." ~ Christina Aguilara

itzhak bareket

15 years 11 months ago