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magics02
Jun 05, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Billow Of Clouds

 

Billow of clouds overhead
white plumes move steadily
blackened skies turn rapidly
sun beats down across the land

Another hot summer day
filled high with temperature
thunderstorms rolling in
crackling flashes of electricity

Lightening strikes again
Hails the rainstorm pounding down
from billows of clouds overhead
downpours of water here again

To cool a temptress airs
sweltering heat, a water spouts
feeding flowers and grass
nourishment, once again

Summer's heat is here
we hover safely inside
wait and weather the storm
Overpassed, returning once again

The stale airs, for our sun will soon
peek out the heat and glare
as we await another billowing
sky of darkness to cleanse

Mother Earth and her lands
returning a summer's story
of heat and all it's glory
billows of clouds, we do

Keep watch over skies
as summer days
have arrived.

mms 6.05.10

— magics02, Jun 05, 2010

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scribbler

16 years ago

clouds

Good description of southern summer swelter.Snowbirds should try us out in August HA!HA!.........scribbler
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Scribe

for those bright stars this morning:) and as always your support and reads of my muse. See you soon Peace Mona xoxox
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magics02

16 years ago

No not for the contest

Just my thoughts early this morning as I looked to the skies. I will be out most of the day and will join you all tonite with Geez. Peace mona xoxo
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

mmmmmmmmm summer

mmmmmmmm summer I love it. nice read my friend, makes me want it to get hot here.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

magic mona

nice descriptive love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi and hello this reads good to me and it`s a theme i have wanted to write on before good stuf ,,,,,,,,,zigs
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mona

there were a few lines that in my opinion needed tweaking its a rainy afternoon here soooo I did an edit ... if you dont like any of it scrap it ... what you like your welcome too love and hugs JayCee Pillows of cloud overhead white plumes move steadily blackened skies turn rapidly sun beats down across the land another hot summer day filled high with temperature thunderstorms rolling in crackling flashes of electricity lightening strikes again Hails the rainstorm pounding down from billows of clouds overhead downpours of water here again to cool a temptress air sweltering heat, a water spout feeding flowers and grass nourishment once again summer’s heat is here we hover safely inside wait and weather the storm Overpassed, returned once again the still air, for our sun will soon peek out the heat and glare as we await another billowing sky of darkness to cleanse Mother Earth and her lands, return summertime’s story of heat and all it’s glory pillows of clouds. we do keep watch of the skies ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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magics02

16 years ago

Jayne

Thank you I got another message to shorten up the lines what do you think of that and what words beside returneth is changed. Can you put the corrections next time for me in brackets as I am lazy lol What I mean is I had to scroll up and down until I got tired of that and just pasted and copied your revisions and worked in with that. I am reviewing it, so nice of you to take time out to give this one a go around, I do so appreciate that very much. Hope all is well today for you. Grazie Love Mona xoxoxo
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magics02

16 years ago

Jayne

I sure appreciate it and I did make some necessary revisions and changed it to billows of clouds instead of pillows, for the storms clouds are darkended from a white pillow of a cloud. I did break it down a bit from Docs request as I can see it is easier on the eyes to read/ Let me know how you think of it now and it is great your take on it to help me along. I noticed I also use THe and OF alot and I am working towards diminishing those repetitive words. I shall await your review Grazie Love,Mona xoxoxo
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years ago

Hey, Mona....

...I saw your careful revisions, and just had to say how much I think it's improved your poetic effort. An excellent job.....but, really ! What do I know? Loved it ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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shirley harrison

15 years 12 months ago

Magic Mona!

beautiful and it brought back alot of memories of storms i have been in! on an Aeroplane in the middle of the sky over Canada! i never liked flying again after that! beautiful poem! much love shirl...... shirley harrison